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Some people hesitate between getting a job and starting their own business. While the idea of not having a boss and working on one's own schedule may sound tempting, financial risks and stress sometimes outweigh these advantages. In your opinion what are the pros and cons of working in a company?

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The table discusses the children’s issues which divided into seven sections from two different elementary schools for two consecutive years, 2005 and 2015. Overall, in 2005, the main
problem
 for
school
 A was following
instruction
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instructions
the instruction
, while in 2013 the handwriting becomes the biggest issue.
Besides
 that, in the
second
school
 (B) the most children’s
problem
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problems
was concentrating
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were concentrating
 on their lessons and in 2013 the verbal
problem
 added
with
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to
 it. In 2005, the two main difficulties for
school
 A were concentration and instruction to be followed with 40% and 42% respectively. While, for
school
 b, the leading issues belonged to verbal (14%) and
also
 concentration
with
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by
 15%. The other problems for
school
 A were higher than
school
b and
an unofficial association of people or groups
band
 the least of them were reading ability
with
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by
 22%.
while
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While
 the
school
 b minimum issue was spelling (5%). In 2013,
school
 A overall experienced less
problem
 despite
last
 year and most of them were handwriting 28% and spelling 25%. While the most problems in 2005 became the least of them with 18%.
On the other hand
,
school
 B stayed relatively the same and verbal and concentration both shared 15% and the smallest issues appear
on
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in
 handwriting (7%) and reading (9%).

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