The graph below shows the population figures for different types of turtles in India from 1980 to 2012.
The line graph below illustrates the
population
figures
for different species
of turtles
over 32 years between 1980 and 2012 in India.
Overall
, the population
of leatherback Turtles
has increased over the period
whereas
green turtle
and olive ridley Fix the agreement mistake
turtles
turtles
experienced a decline in their numbers with the latter suffering the most.
With regards to individual species
, leatherback turtle species
saw a graudal
increase in Correct your spelling
gradual
population
from 100% in 1980 to 140% in 1998 post which
their Correct word choice
and
figures
fluctuated before settling at around 120% by the end of the period
. In contrast
, Altough
Correct your spelling
although
Olive
ridley Correct article usage
the Olive
species
population
fluctuated before rising to 110% in 1997 which was also
it
highest number, it later saw an exactly opposite trend to leatherback and slumped to just around 60% by 2012.
Change the pronoun
its
On the other hand
, The figures
for all the species
fluctuated over the entire period
with the final population
about 5% higher than that in 1980. Similarly
, green turtles
numbers Change noun form
turtles'
turtle's
also
saw a fluctuating trend with the figures
slipping from 100% in 1980 to 90% by the end of the period
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