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Some people say that parents should decide on what kind of medical care their children should receive, while others believe that this is the state’s responsibility Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #parents #care #children #state’s #responsibility
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, It is always better if the state is responsible and can take
care
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 of the children. To discuss
further
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, some countries like Canada, Newzeland and some other
developed
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developers
 and responsible countries takes
care
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 of the children's
health
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. They keep track of the of the progress records of the child
health
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 and maintain the charts. They keep track of the of the vaccinations and its history. When the states are taking
care
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 of it, obviously, child specialist doctors who are taking
care
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 of it. Since they are the professionals,
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 very good
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 will be taken in the right direction. When the children are sick peace of mind of the parents is gone and the whole family is disturbed.
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, healthy Child, healthy family, healthy community.
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, when the State or Government is not very responsible, obviously parents have to take
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 of their children's
health
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. In case of educated parents, they can gather information, surf net, educate themselves and will see to it that task is accomplished. If the government is not responsible and parents are not educated
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this
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 is really a pathetic situation. To conclude, if the State takes responsibility of children's
health
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 that's the best.
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