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The pie charts below show the proportion of carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different diets. Summarize the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the proportion of carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different diets. Summarize the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart gives information about the
proportion
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 of
carbohydrates
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,
protein
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 and fat in different diets. It is noticeable that the
proportion
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 of
carbohydrates
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 in
healthy
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a healthy
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diet
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 and
healthy
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diet
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 for sport is more than
other
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 two parts.
By contrast
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, the percentage of
carbohydrates
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 is the same as
protein
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.
Except
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 the 40% of
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protein
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the protein
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in
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 average, the
proportion
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 of
protein
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 is
account
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 for the
second
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 in the other two
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diet
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diets
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.
Also
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, whatever in which
diet
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, the
proportion
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 of fat is the least. The
number of
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the
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apply
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percentage of fat both in
healthy
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a healthy
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diet
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 and
average
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the average
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diet
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 is 20, and it is 15% in
healthy
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a healthy
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diet
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 for sport. In summary, the
proportion
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 of
carbohydrates
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,
protein
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 and fat is roughly similar in these three diets.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, carbohydrates, protein, diet with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 5 times.
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