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The bar chart below shows the average Australian water consumption in selected cities for last year. The pie chart shows the distribution of Australian water consumption for last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the average Australian water consumption in selected cities for last year. The pie chart shows the distribution of Australian water consumption for last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates,
water
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 consumption in Australian cities and different level of
uses
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use
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 of
water
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. Starting with higher
water
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 uses in
Australia
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Australian
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 cities was Parth. There was 300
kilolitet
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kiloliter
water
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consume
Wrong verb form
consumed
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 in
a
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the
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last
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 year.
Linking Words
Similarly
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,Similarly
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 agricultural area
was tack
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was tacked
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 67% of
water
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 use in a same time period.
However
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, Adelaide and Brisbane was almost
same
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the same
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 consumption of
water
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was
Unnecessary verb
apply
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250 kiloliter, at
a
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the
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 same time, Melbourne and Canberra
was
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were
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lowest
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the lowest
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water
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 users
in
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apply
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last
Linking Words
 year.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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