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The table below shows the preferred TV programs by the different age groups in a european country in 2012.

The table below shows the preferred TV programs by the different age groups in a european country in 2012.
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The preferences of people of different
age
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 groups on television programmes in a
european
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European
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 nation in 2012
is
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are
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 explicated by the tabular chart. At a cursory glance, the dominant feature of the graph is
that
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the
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 maximum proportion of children
prefer
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prefers
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 to watch cartoons who were between the
age
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 of 11-15years.
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, the percentage of adolescents between
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age
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the age
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 group of
16-20years
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16-20 years
liked
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who liked
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 news was relatively double as compared to
the
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apply
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TV dramas.
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, soap
opera
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operas
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nd
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and
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 featured films were equally preferred by European citizens of
age
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 less than 15. Scrutinizing
further
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, youngsters of
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age
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the age
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 group 21 - 25 were
5times
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5 times
 more interested in feature films than they watch cartoons. Interestingly, the choice of watching cartoons
was
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decreased
within
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with
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age
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,
however
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, increased in news and TV dramas.
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, it can be deduced that the preferences of
eupropeans
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Europeans
 were changed
according to
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 their
age
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.

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