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Some think that government should allow women to join the army, the navy and air force just like men. Do you agree or disagree?

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The line graph compares three different
countries namely
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countries, namely
 the USA, Mexico and Canada in terms of their percentage of population using the
internet
 from 1999 to 2009. Overall, the proportion of
internet
 users of both three nations increased over the period of 10 years.
Although
 all trends were similar according to a general rise, the percentage of Mexico was the least in all
years
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year
. In 1999, there
was
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were
 20% of the total Americans accessing the
internet
, followed by 10% and around 5% those of Canadians and Mexicans respectively. The figure for Canada
then
 rose dramatically and overtook that of the USA at around 45% in the year 2001. After a 10-year period of growing, the proportion of Canadians getting access to the
internet
 recorded 100% in 2009. By 2005, there was a similar percentage of people in the United States and Canada who connected to the
internet
, at 70% each. At the end of the period, 80% the USA's citizens used the
internet
, twice as much as that of Mexico.
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