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The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 diagram shows a
machine
 based on
water
 wave
energy
 and its location options. It's clear from the diagram that the
water
waves
 can produce
an
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electrical
energy
 throw
wave-
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a wave-energy
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energy
machine
, which
depend
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depends
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 on
air flow
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airflow
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 and
turbine
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a turbine
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.
According to
 what is shown, the
wave-
energy
machine
 has a hole at the bottom in the opposite direction of
water
waves
 to allow
water
come
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 in.
This
water
 wave generates an air flow Stream, which moves turbines. And in turn, the turbines will move the internal engine of
electricity
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the electricity
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 generator and produce
an
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electrical
energy
. The other diagram views the suitable location options
of
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 the
wave-
energy
machine
. The appropriate location depends
on
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especially on
waves
. Meaning, if the
water
waves
 are large,
it
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they
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 will generate a high output,
this
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which
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 means it needs a huge
wave-
energy
machine
 which
demand
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 a high installation cost. And vice versa.
To sum up
, we could say that the
wave-
energy
machine
 is a useful
machine
 aid in producing
energy
 from
the
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environment
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 resources. The
wave-
energy
machine
 size and cost depend on
water
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the water
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 level and
a
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the
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 magnitude of the
waves
.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words machine, water, energy, waves, wave-energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moves" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "wave" was used 7 times.
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