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The charts below show UK and USA energy consumption in 2000 and 2006.

The charts below show UK and USA energy consumption in 2000 and 2006.
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The charts delineate the
consumption
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 of
energy
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 between 2000 and 2006 in
UK
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the UK
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 and
USA
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the USA
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.
It is clear that
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 the percentage of
oil
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consumption
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 surged overwhelmingly in both countries between 2000 and 2006.
However
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,
gas
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 was the most-chosen source of
energy
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 in 2006 compared to nuclear power. Looking at the details,
oil
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 was the most utilized source in UK and USA in 2000,at approximately 27% and 37% .In the same year other renewable sources,
by contrast
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,were less common in both countries than the proportion of
oil
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,
gas
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 and coal,at 10% and 5% respectively. In 2006, the rate of
gas
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consumption
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 shot up by 19%(from 20 to 39)in
UK
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the UK
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.
However
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,in
USA
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the USA
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 there was a slight rise in
gas
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energy
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 (25%). Nuclear power made up a small proportion
in
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of
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 the
energy
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consumption
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 in both countries,
while
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 the rate of
oil
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 remained unchanged in
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the two-aformentioned
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two-aformentioned
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two-aforementioned
 years.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, energy, oil, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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