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The bar chart below shows the percentage of students who passed their high school competency exams, by subject and gender, during the period 2010-2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write the least 150 words.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of students who passed their high school competency exams, by subject and gender, during the period 2010-2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write the least 150 words.
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The bar chart gives information about the percentage of boys and
girls
 who passed their high school competency exams
with
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 seven different subjects between
the
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2010 and 2011.
Overall
, they have
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 changes
of
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 both sides of physics, chemistry, history, geography, foreign languages, mathematics
together with
 computer science.
Consequently
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girls
 have reached the lowest 20.1
percent
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 from geography,
whereas
boy's
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boys'
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 result shows
higher
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a higher
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 30.4% than
girls
. In spite of
this
, the minimum consequence of boys was 14.1
percent
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 from chemistry.
Although
,
schoolboy's
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the
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highest upshot was 48.4
percent
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of
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 mathematics. In comparison,
girls
 have achieved considerably more upshot
from
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this
 subject.
Nonetheless
, wherefrom foreign languages schoolboys have gone better, with 46.8%.
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, schoolgirls have exceeded
with
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their top scores. Because of
this
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 they
were
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made more than 55
percent
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 of computer science. For
this
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reason
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reasons
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girls
 have attained almost 60%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words girls, percent with synonyms.
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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Competency exams
  • High school
  • Pass rate
  • Disparity
  • Performance gap
  • Subject-specific analysis
  • Year-to-year progression
  • Regression
  • Overall trends
  • Significant
  • Notably wide/narrow
  • Conclusion
  • Observations
  • Consistencies
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