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The bar chart below shows the percentage of students who passed their high school competency exams, by subject and gender, during the period 2010-2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write the least 150 words.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of students who passed their high school competency exams, by subject and gender, during the period 2010-2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write the least 150 words.
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The bar chart gives information about the percentage of boys and
girls
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 who passed their high school competency exams
with
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 seven different subjects between
the
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2010 and 2011.
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, they have
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of
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 both sides of physics, chemistry, history, geography, foreign languages, mathematics
together with
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 computer science.
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Consequently
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girls
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 have reached the lowest 20.1
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percent
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 from geography,
whereas
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boy's
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boys'
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 result shows
higher
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a higher
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 30.4% than
girls
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. In spite of
this
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, the minimum consequence of boys was 14.1
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percent
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per cent
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 from chemistry.
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,
schoolboy's
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a schoolboy's
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the
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highest upshot was 48.4
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percent
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of
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 mathematics. In comparison,
girls
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 have achieved considerably more upshot
from
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this
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 subject.
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, wherefrom foreign languages schoolboys have gone better, with 46.8%.
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, schoolgirls have exceeded
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their top scores. Because of
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this
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 they
were
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made more than 55
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percent
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per cent
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 of computer science. For
this
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reason
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reasons
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girls
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 have attained almost 60%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words girls, percent with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Competency exams
  • High school
  • Pass rate
  • Disparity
  • Performance gap
  • Subject-specific analysis
  • Year-to-year progression
  • Regression
  • Overall trends
  • Significant
  • Notably wide/narrow
  • Conclusion
  • Observations
  • Consistencies
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