it is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age . Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children ?

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Raising children

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have been

are being

always the hardest part of

being a parent and different parents have their

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had a parent and different parents, their

had a parent and different parents their

have a parent and different parents their

own ways to teach their children.

Therefore

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there are many arguments around

this

topic

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Some said that it was important for children to

learned

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learn

the difference between

right

and wrong at an early age and punishment was necessary to help them learn

this

distinction

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To my mind

this

idea is totally

right

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By direct children in their early age

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parents can make them control their own

behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

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People always said that if you teach children when they are still little kids

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they will learn it faster and they will listen to what you told them and that has been proved by scientists

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Just look

right

the way in reality

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if you compare the kid who has been directed by their parent is rarely get in trouble than the other one

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Yet there are still many parents let their children do what they want even if they behave really

bad

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badly

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So in order to demonstrate the distinction to children what is wrong and what is

right

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parents have to make punishments

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But the question is what kind of punishments should they get

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Since difference children have their own character

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so adults need to based on that to make the punishment

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For

instant

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an instant

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with the child who likes to go outside

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your parents can make them stay home

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or with the child who likes to stay in and just playing with their phone

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you can turn off the internet

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Teaching and directing children at an early age is really important

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However

the way you did it is very important too

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Because all the things you teach them at that time can be all that stuffs can make them the person they gonna be in the future

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Topic Vocabulary:

punishment
positive reinforcement
consequences
time-outs
removal of privileges
open communication
clear expectations
consistency
fairness
disciplinary action
proportionate
moral values
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