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The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The maps below show the village of Stokeford in 1930 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The
two
 maps express the information about
village
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the village
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 of Stokeford between
the
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apply
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1930 and 2010.
Initially
, in 1930-year
village
 was incomplete with
the
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shops, gardens and houses. But as it seems, it has drastically changed over the eighty years.
Overall
, as maps show, it has created farmland in the middle of the street.
Despite
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, river stoke has kept
it's
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 view.
Furthermore
number
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a number
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 of houses
have
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has
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 extended. As they seem, they have constructed on the southern side of the
village
. Taking a closer, farmland has
set
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been set
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 up on the east side of the district else.
As a
result
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 they were
two
 farmlands. Even though,
two
 shops which situated on the
west
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 part of the district have
destroyed
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been destroyed
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.
Large
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The large
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 house
of
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 the left side has retirement.
On the contrary
,
post
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the post
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 office
was continue
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continued
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 to work in the former place. Primary school got longer and larger than the
previous
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. Considering, it
made
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was made
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 bigger with adding of
two
 mini primary school buildings.
Upon
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the
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conclusion,
with
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in
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this
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these
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ways
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 Stokeford
village
 has developed and
became
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become
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 better.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • village
  • maps
  • Stokeford
  • 1930
  • 2010
  • main features
  • overview
  • changes
  • similarities
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