The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in

Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
As shown in the chart, the vast majority of the
students
both men and women were seeking part-time education.
Overall
, part-time male seekers had reduced in
1980s
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than the previous ten
years
by around 200
students
, and increased slightly after
1980s
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the 1980s
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,
while
part-time female
students
had
rose
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by 100
students
in
1980s
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the 1980s
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than 1970s, and by 300
students
in
1990s
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the 1990s
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than 1980s.
Although
full-time men were around ten
percent
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per cent
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out of the part-time in
1970s
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the 1970s
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,
this
had increased to almost
the
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a
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quarter of the part-time in
1990s
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the 1990s
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.
In
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the other hand, full-time females had gone up four times in
1980s
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the 1980s
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and 1990s than
1970s
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the 1970s
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, with a small difference between
1980s
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the 1980s
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and 1990s, when the
last
ten
years
had had
larger
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a larger
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number of
students
. Generally, the female
students
were less than the males in the beginning
years
, which had changed in
the
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apply
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recent
years
, with more females than males in both part and full-time sections.

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  • engaged in
  • distinct
  • categorizes
  • enrollment status
  • surpass
  • compared to
  • stability
  • increased significantly
  • equal number
  • gap
  • outnumber
  • decreased
  • part-time courses
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