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The table illustrates the proportion of the monthly household income of five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing, and entertainment Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. The proportion of household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing, and entertainment

The table illustrates the proportion of the monthly household income of five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing, and entertainment Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. The proportion of household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing, and entertainment
The table illustrates the five different European
countries
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 spend their household income on
food
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 and drinks, housing, clothing and
entertainments
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entertainment
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. It is immediately apparent all five
countries
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 spent most of
the
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their
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 household income on
food
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 and drinks and housing.
To begin
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 with, France, Germany and UK spend
majority
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the majority
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 of their income on housing, at 31%, 33% and 37% respectively.
In contrast
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, they spend around a quarter on
food
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 and drink.
Opposite
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The opposite
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 was true for Turkey and Spain they spend
large
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a large
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 amount on
food
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 and drinks, at 36% and 31%, and on housing, at 20% and 18% respectively.
On the other hand
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, all five
countries
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 spend much less on
the
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apply
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clothing and entertainment. France and Spain spend less than 10%.
While
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 the other three
countries
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 spend the same around
the
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apply
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13%.
Furthermore
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, Germany
spend
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spends
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 most on the clothing, at 19 %
whereas
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 UK and Turkey spend half of the amount. In conclusion, Housing was
largest
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the largest
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 expenditure item for France, Germany and UK
while
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 the
food
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 and drink was
biggest
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the biggest
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 expenditure for Turkey and Spain.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • allocate
  • proportion
  • expenditure
  • speculate
  • real estate
  • average income
  • trends
  • significant differences
  • lifestyle
  • surprising findings
  • notable patterns
  • economic priorities
  • living standards
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