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Q. Some people think a country benefits from a large proportion of young university students, others think sending young people to universities only lead to graduate unemployment. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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With the advanced education, the
number
 of
undergraduate
Suggestion
undergraduates
 has been increasing. Some insist that a
number
 of
university
 students only result in rising an unemployment rate of graduates and it is not beneficial for
society
.
Although
 I understand
this
 opinion, I would argue that the large proportion of undergraduates has positive effects on
society
. Admittedly, there are some disadvantages to the increasing
number
 of
university
student
Suggestion
students
.
To begin
 with, many young people may put pressure on themselves to have a bachelor's degree even though it is not necessary.
For example
, in Korea, almost people in modern
society
 tend to go to the
university
 after being graduated from high school. Because of
this
 tendency, some people could apply for admission to
university
 without enough thinking what they want to be.
Therefore
, if those could graduate from
university
, they are likely to be unsatisfied with their major. In
this
 sense, a lack of confidence with their major could lead to frequent failures in finding decent jobs.
As a result
,
this
 tendency to demand higher education could not only increase graduate unemployment rate, but
also
 cause individuals to lose time and money.
However
, I still believe that well-educated people influence
society
 positively. Programmes aimed at preparing global competition for employment help
university
 students to find high quality jobs.
This
 is because
university
 students can improve their ability through these programmes, competing with their peers and obtaining expertise in their field. It is a proved fact that intelligent people can bring about more benefits for economic growth than physical workers.
In addition
, strengthening individuals' ability in terms of their major can successfully contribute to social outcomes
such
 as health care or technology industries.
As a result
, developing the level of education will lead to a national growth more and more in many ways. In conclusion, according to the aforementioned reasons, the increasing
number
 of graduates might have a negative effect on both individuals and
society
, but I believe that
this
 should be seen as a positive development in many ways.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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