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Some people think its best to accept bad job,other argues that it is better to try and improve the situation.

#people #job #situation
There are over 6 billion people in the world and to get a dream job is in everyone's mind.A
person
 is always trying to give his best among the
compition
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competition
 to expand his career.
some
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Some
 of them are successful in doing
this
,
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,
others are not.
as
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As
 the globalization is establishing in the world, opportunities are being
devlop
being changed over time so as to be e.g. stronger or more complete or more useful
developed
 for new
jobs but
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jobs, but
 they always want a best out of them.
However life
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However, life
 gives
person
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people
a person
the person
 a chance to modify himself
accordingly
 because always satisfy
in
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with
 what you have don't draw
person
 to
developement
Suggestion
develop
development
.
if
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If
 one
don't get
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doesn't get
 a preferred job or income he should always make a step forward to make it possible.
Leftout
person
 is only culprit
for
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in
 the self destruction.In the case of famous business tycoon
mr.
a form of address for a man
Mr.
jack
a man who serves as a sailor
Jack
ma
objective form of "I"
me
 he was the man to fail the university six
times but
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times, but
 his dedication and attempts in the right direction make him successful. In some conditions it is advisable to accept
current situation
Suggestion
the current situation
 if he
going
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goes
is going
 through any financial
crisis
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crisis, then
then
 his current job will help him to give a lift or to get out of the situation to work for his best. So in my point of view every
person
 has a potential and
ability
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the ability
 to achieve whatever he
want
Suggestion
wants
 so one should try to not accept
current situation
Suggestion
the current situation
 and make continues effort to get his best and a
person
 must never refuse for
hardword
,
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,
beacuse
for the reason that; on account of
because
hardwork
Suggestion
hard work
 is a key to success.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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