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The maps below show the center of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its developments. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the center of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its developments. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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These two maps illustrate the current condition and future plan for Islip
town
center
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. There are many differences in
future
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the future
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plan
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plans
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 for
development
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the development
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 of
Islip
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the Islip
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town
center
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.
On
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 the current situation of Islip
town
center
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, there is one main
road
 and two side roads which are connected to
school
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the school
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 and
park
 respectively. Between side roads, the shops are located along
the
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both sides of
main
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the main
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road
.
Countryside
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 is located
at
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in
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 the northern
area
 of
town
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the town
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center
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 behind the shops. In the southern
area
, most of
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the lands
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lands
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land
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are
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 covered by housing. In the new planned development, many infrastructure developments have been made
on
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 the prediction stage.
Most
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The most
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 common attraction is the circular ring
road
 with dual roadway which is mostly connected to
many
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any
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part
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 of
planned
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the planned
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area
. The original main
road
 in
planned
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the planned
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 circular ring
road
 is projected to pedestrian way. Obvious changes had
made
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been made
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 in the northern part. All the shops are grouped into
shopping
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the shopping
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center
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centers
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.
Bus
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The bus
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 station and car
park
 are
also
 planned to be built to the west and east of
shopping
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the shopping
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center
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centre
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.
Beside
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car
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the car
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park
,
new
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a new
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 housing project is
also
 involved.
At
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 the southern part of
town
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the town
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center
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, there are no big changes. There will be previous shop stalls and a shrink of the
area
 of
park
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the park
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 and a little extension in the
area
 of
school
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the school
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. The rest
area
 is for the purpose of previous housing and new housing. In conclusion, between
current
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 map and
future
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the future
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 planned map, many modifications are predicted. Many infrastructures are planned to be built for the prediction of
the
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population growth, transportation and development.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, center, road, park, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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