The line graph below shows the consumption of 4 kinds of meat in a European country from 1979 to 2004.
The graph illustrates the ingestion of meat and
fish
over a period of 25 years (from 1979 to 2002) in a country Use synonyms
of
Europe. Change preposition
in
Overall
, the most noticeable trend is that chicken is the only product that has risen significantly in the amount consumed in Linking Words
grams
per person and per week. Use synonyms
While
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,
there has been a dramatic decrease in Remove the comma
apply
beef
and Use synonyms
lamb
. Use synonyms
This
means, for Linking Words
meat
thereAdd a comma
meat,
has
been fluctuations Change the verb form
have
year
by Use synonyms
year
. Use synonyms
Nevertheless
, the ingestion of Linking Words
fish
remains constant over the years, around 50 Use synonyms
grams
per week. In the first place, chicken was the most popular product for people from 1994, when its eating was higher than Use synonyms
lamb
. The quantity of chicken per person was slightly under 150 Use synonyms
grams
in 1979 reaching 250 Use synonyms
grams
in 2004. In the second place, Use synonyms
lamb
and Use synonyms
beef
had similar paths. The line of Use synonyms
beef
was higher than the line of Use synonyms
lamb
. In the first Use synonyms
year
, the consumption Use synonyms
for
Change preposition
of
beef
was up to 200 Use synonyms
grams
, and Use synonyms
for
Change preposition
of
lamb
was 150, across the years both suffered significant high and low peaks, but with the same end, a decrease approximated Use synonyms
of
150 Change preposition
apply
grams
per person in 2004 from 1979. Use synonyms
Finally
, the least common product was Linking Words
fish
, only 50 Use synonyms
grams
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ingered
per individual. Correct your spelling
injured
entered
However
, Linking Words
fish
has been the food with the least changes in the quantity Use synonyms
eating
from the first Wrong verb form
eaten
year
to the Use synonyms
last
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