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some people think that in order to solve traffic and transportation problems people should be encouraged to live in cities rather than in suburbs or in the countryside. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The question of what are the solutions to
traffic
 issues is open to debate. Some people think that residents should move to urban cities
instead
 of rural areas in an attempt to deal with
traffic
 congestion. In my opinion, I totally disagree with the idea because it is likely that there are the implications for
traffic
 congestion if people drastically move to big cities.
First
, moving to central cities could make congested
traffic
 more severe in that the situation of
traffic
 in cities is currently congested and urban areas are densely populated, which leads to increasing problems about infrastructure
such
 as wear and tear on city streets.
Second
, there are several measures that we could implement to relieve
traffic
 congestion,
such
 as using public transportation system.
This
 could reduce the volume of vehicles in
traffic
 that causes gridlock during rush hour.
Moreover
, we can improve
traffic
 infrastructure to make the society mobile so that commuters could easily travel from home to work, meaning reduce the waiting time for people to safely navigate intersections In conclusion, I think we should introduce other solutions to
traffic
 problems rather than migrating to cities.
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