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It was observed that in some countries not enough students are choosing to study science subjects at university. What are the causes? What effects does this have on society?

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According to recent belief, learners of certain countries are showing reluctance to study
science
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 as
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first subject
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a first subject
the first subject
 at university. In
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 essay, I intend to discuss both, motives of
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 issue and influence on society. I deem one reason that obviously stands out is
aridity
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the aridity
 of exact sciences. Having faced with difficulties in acquiring scientific
knowledge
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knowledge, such
such
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 as terms related to
science
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, estimations, formulas and specific definitions of different phenomena, students alter their preferences in
favor
promote over another
favour
 of unscientific areas. From my point of view, an additional cause would be that people are determined to have prejudiced opinions towards their
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 career in
science
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. Generally,
this
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biases
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bias
are
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is
skeptical
denying or questioning the tenets of especially a religion
sceptical
. With the absence of innate skills in specific
fields including
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fields, including
 mathematics or chemistry, learners are likely to fail in terms of progress in the selected domain, which leads to low salary and position in future profession.
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, I assume it is
complete sign
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a complete sign
 of absurdity to choose
science
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 at the same time having a notion that it will be impossible to compete with gifted colleagues. When it comes to
impacts
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impact
 on society, considering the fact that
science
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 educated employees
were
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have been
had been
 always in demand it is evident that without qualified scientists, many spheres will be lagging and it can result in undesirable consequences. If there will not be enough
scholars
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scholars, for
for
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example in
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example, in
 farming industry a plenty of innovative ideas cannot provided to facilitate
work
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the work
 of croppers. In conclusion, I think the main reasons why students unwilling to study
science
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are
introduces an alternative
or
 lack of enthusiasm and seeing of not bright future,
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 it may cause lack of staff in some fields.
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