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In many cities the use of video cameras in public places is being increased in order to reduce crime, but some people believe that these measures restrict our individual freedom. Do the benefits of increased security outweigh the drawbacks?

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It is true that the use of CCTV is becoming widespread. In
this
 regard, it is sometimes argued that an increasing number of cameras in public places could violate the privacy of people.
However I
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However, I
 do believe that the advantages could outweigh the possible drawbacks. Being watched or even being controlled continuously amid an immense number of surveillance cameras could deprive the sense of freedom from people. People always would feel that someone is spying on him and watching his behaviour in public areas.
Moreover
, covering the large area by the cameras would be considered a threat to security of community. Hacker probably could control the servers of public CCTVs and they could steal the data and recorded video.
For example
, They might use Artificial Intelligent technologies like image processing to track or identify their targets by misusing these resources.
However
, CCTV could be extremely positive for the security of society. Police could use the recorded videos from crime locations to identify easily the criminals. In
this
 way, public cameras play an important role to protect us and deter committing crimes.
In addition
, the frequent patrolling of police becomes decreased in favour of installing CCTV throughout the city.
As a result
, the cost of police operation would decline significantly. In Conclusion, I can understand why people worried about surveillance cameras that may confine their freedom, but it seems to me that the benefits of cameras do outweigh their potential negative prospects.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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