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Bringing in Foreign Workers to fill positions that domestic workers are unwilling to do can cause problems in the local community and should, therefore, be stopped. To what extent do you agree with this?

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Filling local positions with foreign workers is always controversial, but in some cases we need skilled workers from outside. In those cases, employers don't care about background. In some situations local communities can refuge to do particular jobs, it may be because of the politics, culture or they are against the job process.
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 time filling the positions with foreigners will be helpful to continue the
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, but it causes issues with the local community. Local communities always have a strong bond and they are the backbone of the local businesses. They can support local
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 in many ways,
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to so extreme a degree
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 as workers, regular customers and sometimes as partners. Local customs and politics can make them unwilling to do particular jobs and they
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also object to the
 filling of those with any other skilled workers. They can start protesting against
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, which damages the reputation of the company.
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 even causes severe losses, which are never expected. Foreigners who came to replace the positions will never get support from the natives.
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 creates a worse situation that no foreigners will ready to get into trouble. The only way to stop
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 chaos is negotiation, employers or
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 leaders have to talk with the local community. They have should come up with a plan to satisfy the people. They have to understand what exactly creating the problem, if the locals are not willing to do
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 job here, maybe they should plan anywhere other than that place. They should speak with local leaders and convince them to continue with
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 all reduce the risks of the problems in the local community.
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