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The line chart shows fish and meat consumption in Europe from 1979 to 2004

The line chart shows fish and meat consumption in Europe from 1979 to 2004
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The line chart depicts the expenditure
of
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on
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 fish and other types of
meat
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 of a nation in Europe over the period of 25
years
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 from 1979 to 2004. From the graph, it is obvious that the amount of
chicken’s
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chicken
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meat
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 made up the first place for the most consumption
while
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 other
meat
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such
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 as beef and lamb had an opposite trend.
On the contrary
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, the figure
of
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for
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 fish seems to have stayed unchanged through those
years
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. Looking into more details, the consumption of
chicken’s
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chicken
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meat
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 started from nearly 150 in 1979 and grew continuously until it peaked
over
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at over
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 250 and seemed to have stayed stable in the
last
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 few
years
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. In terms of fish, with
the
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a
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 amount of over 50 in 1979, it remained the same data until 2004.
On the other hand
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,
beef’s
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beef
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 consumption reached
at
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apply
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over 200 in the first year of the period, but it fluctuated and peaked at nearly 250 in 1984 before decreasing dramatically
at
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to
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 100 in 2004.
Similarly
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, the expenditure
of
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on
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 lamb started with the amount of 150 and
then
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, it went down considerably by nearly 100 at 50 in the
last
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years
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 of the period.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words meat, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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