The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
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Over the past 15
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years
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the
number
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of graduated
women
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and
men
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has been increasing more than decreasing and
this
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tendency of rising in the
number
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of
graduate
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students points its peak in 2007.
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both genders mark
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in the
number
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of graduates, all the way down it is noticeable that more
women
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finish their education successfully than
men
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, especially in the past 5
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, when the
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or
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of
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graduates from the gentle sex has risen drastically. From the very beginning of
this
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chart till the end there is no point in which the gap between
women
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and
men
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is smaller than in the first recorded data. It is
unchangeable
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an unchangeable
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tendency that more people from the gentle gender
graduate
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university
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from university
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than from the strong one. During the period of 15
years
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, the
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of
graduate
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women
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is progressively increasing with only one downfall between 1995 and 1998 but
this
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state does not remain for a long time and after 1998 it starts to ascend in the
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again.
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men
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mark
an
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arousal in the
number
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of successfully graduating individuals in long term, their way is marked with more downfalls than
the
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women
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’s. It is obvious that in the period between 1995 and
2002
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the
number
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of
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graduate
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graduates
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men
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is changeable and
in
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at
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no point is higher than that in 1995 – the year before the beginning of
decrease
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the decrease
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. In conclusion, both genders have increased the
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of successfully finishing their education individuals, despite
of
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the fact that
women
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mark greater progress over the
years
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words years, number, women, men, graduate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • general trend
  • fluctuations
  • peaks
  • dips
  • significant differences
  • increase/decrease
  • comparison
  • data
  • period
  • economic conditions
  • policy changes
  • cultural shifts
  • implications
  • workforce
  • economy
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