The diagram shows a method of shaping glass containers.

The diagram shows a method of shaping glass containers.
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The diagram gives information about the process of shaping
glass
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containers.
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, making a
glass
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container
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includes
9-different
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9 different
actions
..
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.
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Firstly
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,
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glass
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the glass
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comes
to
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with
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special
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the special
a special
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stove that it burns
with
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at
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105 temperatures.
Then
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, liquid
glass
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goes to
former
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the former
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and presses with a model of
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glass
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the glass
a glass
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container
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.
After
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this
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,
hot
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the hot
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glass
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is
putted
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put
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in the
second
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mould in order to make a thick wall of a
container
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.
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Next
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,Next
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this
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half-
container
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is filled with air. There it takes the shape of
the
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apply
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glass
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.
Furthermore
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,
unready
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an unready
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container
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goes into the oven and burns
with
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at
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482 temperatures and
then
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goes
for
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to
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cooling
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the cooling
a cooling
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machine,
here
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where
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its temperature decreases up to 25 within 60 mins.
Finally
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, these
glass
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containers are checked by the worker and accepted ones are packaged into boxes
while
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unsuitable ones go for recycling.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words glass, container with synonyms.
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