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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. »

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. »
The two tables contain
sales
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 data For Fairtrade
coffee
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 and bananas in 1999 and 2004. All values are given in
million
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 of
Euros
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. The first table shows the rise
of
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in
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coffee
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sales
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 in all five
countries
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. In the UK, there was an immense increase, from 1.5-20
million
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euros
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.
Although
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 there was an increment in Denmark and Sweden, both
countries
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 expanded their revenues by only 0.2
million
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. Switzerland managed to double their
sales
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 from 1994 to 2004,
while
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 in Belgium incomes were 1.7 times higher compared to 1994. In the
second
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 table, it is Switzerland that collected the highest money from banana
sales
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. Swizz figure
sales
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 jumped from 15 to 47
million
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euros
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,
whereas
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 in Belgium and UK
sales
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 grew from 1-5.5 and 0.6-4
million
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euros
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 respectively. Denmark and Sweden were the only
countries
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 to experience a decline in their incomes, which went from 1.8-1 and 2-0.9
million
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euros
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. Comparing the two tables,
it is clear that
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 all five
countries
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 raised their incomes from
coffee
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,
whereas
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 Sweden and Denmark recorded drops in their banana
sales
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. The highest peak of
coffee
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sales
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 was reached in the UK,
while
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 Switzerland made the most money from bananas.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, coffee, million, euros, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade-labelled
  • sales figures
  • percentage increase/decrease
  • European countries
  • sales volume
  • notable trend
  • exponential growth
  • moderate rise
  • marked decline
  • comparative analysis
  • economic factors
  • consumer preferences
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