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Fossil fuels (coal, oil, natural gas) are the main sources in many countries, but in some countries the use of alternative sources of energy (wind energy and solar energy) are encouraged. To what extent do you think it is a positive or negative development

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As we move
to
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into
 the modern age, Countries require more power to run the systems. Some believe conventional
energy
 is must
to meet
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meet
 the
requirement
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requirement, however
however
 others think to promote or
use
 non conventional
energy
 sources. In my opinion,
Nation
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the Nation
 should adopt natural ways of
energy
 generation, as they are eco-friendly.
To
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Two
 began with, Conventional ways of
energy
 generation is less reliable, they
are continuously depleting
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continuously deplete
 and there is uncertainty about the quantity.
In other words
, before we end up consuming all fossil fuel
energy
 and leaving
use
The objective case of we, the persons speaking
us
 to discover new sources, we should
use
 them
sustainably
.
For example
, Researchers found that fossil fuel
energy
 will be diminished by the end of 2050.
Also
, Conventional sources produce too
much of
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much pollution
pollution
, it is said that
pollution
 changes the flow of
energy
 negatively. There are many harmful gases
such
 as CFC, CFG, and CO. To control environment degradation, we should limit the
use
 of these
energy
 sources and should shift to other means. It was found that air
pollution
 due to fossil fuel was up to 70% which very high.
On the other hand
, Natural
energy
 source
have
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has
 no or very less
pollution
 but are costlier. To conclude, Both
energy
 sources have their advantages and
disadvantages but
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disadvantages, but
 I my opinion, Non-conventional
energy
 source
are
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is
 far better the conventional method because they are found in abundance and have very less impact on the environment.

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