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The free movement of goods across national borders has long been a controversial issue. Some people argue that it is necessary for economic growth, while others claim that it damages local industries. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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One of
the most debatable
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the most debated
 issues of the
last
 century has been the extent to which international
trade
 benefits or harms national economies. Many arguments have been made for and against free
trade
 between nations. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both views and state my own position. Those who support the expansion of
global free
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the global free trade claim
trade
 claim that economies grow faster when they can specialize in just a few industries in which they have a strong advantage.
As a result
, each region or country produces something of value to the world economy.
For example
, East Asia manufactures electronic goods, the Middle East exports energy, and the EU produces luxury items. Free
trade
 proponents claim that dependence on global
trade
 helps to strengthen international cooperation and prevent wars. Meanwhile, opponents of free
trade
-sometimes called ‘protectionists’-claim that the unrestricted movement of goods and services causes damage to local communities.
This
 is because jobs are lost when it becomes cheaper to import a product than to produce it domestically. They
also
 argue that the vast distances travelled by food, oil, and consumer goods
is harming
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are harming
 the environment and making our lives unsustainable.
Protectionists
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The protectionists
 are in favour of tighter controls on the movement of goods and services in order to protect jobs and livelihoods. In conclusion, while there are convincing arguments on both sides of the debate, a return to protectionist policies would surely be a mistake. I believe that global
trade
 is inevitable and should not be restricted. It is no longer realistic for nations to source all of their energy, food, and manufactured goods within their own borders.
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