Some people think that teachers should be responsible for teaching students to judge what is right and wrong so that they can behave well. Others say that teachers should only teach students academic subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is often argued by some people that children’s
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
and moral values should be
responsibility
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the responsibility
of school education, while others claim that teachers should teach exclusively academic disciplines. Both sides have their valid arguments. In my opinion, it is necessary to teach children some ethics in school, because some of them do not have any opportunity to get upbringing from their parents. Examining the former opinion, the primary argument the supporters would put forward is that
school curriculum
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the school curriculum
should teach students how to follow the code of the
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
because
exclusively
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exclusive
academic training, is not the main component of a child’s bright future. Good manners will be useful to a person in all areas of his
life
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life, such
such
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as work, communication with people and social life. It helps categorize different values
such
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as
integrity discipline
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integrity, discipline
and honesty among others and apply them in daily lives, it
also
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influences
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
and allows an individual to make the right choices.
For instance
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, a programme called 'Primary Ethics' is now
taught to around
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taught around
20,000 students in more than 300 schools. It introduces discussion of moral issues in
systematic way
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a systematic way
.
On the contrary
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, opponents’ view suggests that teachers are not responsible for teaching someones
children
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child
how to behave and they already have enough of their work to do. Activities
such
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as preparing material for the lesson, checking copy books, making and checking the exams take a considerable amount of their time. It will be stressful for teachers if,
in addition
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to academic work, they need to perform upbringing tasks as well. It is primarily the responsibility of parents to provide their
child
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children
with the right moral values. In conclusion, teachers play a significant role in
students
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student
students'
student's
life and it is essential to provide children with education of moral values and ethics.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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