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The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Recycling plays an important role nowadays. Countries Started to recycle
from
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about 40 years ago. The graph shows the recycling rate of different materials from 1982-2010. First, It can be noticed from the graph that every
materiel
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material
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 has considered a change throughout the 30 years. Paper and Carboards have always been in first place in the rate of recycled material;
however
, it
also
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 considered a drop and an increase between 1986-1994.
Moreover
, glass containers have always been in
second
 place after paper and containers with
fluctuated
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percent
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percentages
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 between 50% and 60%.
On the other hand
, we can see that both aluminium
cans
 and plastic recycling
percent
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 never
decreases
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.
For example
, Aluminum
cans
 have always been increasing. It considered about
40
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% increase
throughout
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 1986-2010.
Furthermore
, plastics considered a slight increase throughout the years.
for instance
.it started
with
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 about 2% in1990 and ended with 9%at 2010
Overall
, we can see that
paper
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the paper
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 plastic
recycle
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recycling
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 percentage is decreasing over time and
aluminum
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aluminium
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cans
 are increasing, which means that one-day
aluminum
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aluminium
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cans
 will have the highest rate of recycled materials.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cans with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • recycled
  • materials
  • increased
  • paper and cardboard
  • plastic
  • glass
  • metal
  • significant increase
  • relatively stable
  • fluctuating
  • period
  • starting
  • reaching
  • gradually increasing
  • remained low
  • experienced
  • showed
  • greatest
  • proportion
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