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Some people think that environmental problems are too big for individuals to solve, while others think that the government cannot solve these environmental problems unless individuals make some action.

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Some people think that it is difficult for country authorities to solve environmental problems without the help of individuals. Other think that the environmental problem is very huge for individuals to solve it. According to me contribution of both can lead to the reduction of all our environmental problems. In
this
 essay I will discuss both aspect and give my opinion on it. To leave the weight of environmental problem on governmental seem acceptable,
h
owever
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however, government
government
 cannot do anything without the help of the public.
First
 of all,
government
 can minimise the pollution by imposing rules for factories to recycle waste, but again to maintain track of waste is a tedious job for a
government
.For an instant, factories who create waste, dumps it in the river
instead
 of recycling it, seem impossible to track by
government
.
Government
 can create rules for saving
e
nvironment
Suggestion
the environment
against global warming, but if people are not following it
then
 no one can save the
environment
.
Therefore
, people should equally contribute in saving the
environment
. On the other side, without the contribution of people,
g
overnment
Suggestion
the government
cannot save
e
nvironment.
Suggestion
the environment
If
g
overnment
Suggestion
the government
wants people to take part in saving
e
nvironment,
Suggestion
the environment
 they need to aware people about environmental problems.
For example
,
government
 can include a compulsory course of
environment
 protection in schools and colleges.In order to protect
e
nvironment
Suggestion
the environment
not just
g
overnment but
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government, but
people can
also
 help to aware different people through campaigns or opening NGO's for
environment
 preservation. To conclude that It is not the duty of a single person or authorities, but it is a contribution of everybody to save
e
nvironment.
Suggestion
the environment
In my opinion,
g
overnment
Suggestion
the government
can help people and v
iseversa
for protection of our
environment
.
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