What can international organizations really do for us ? What are their limits ?

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United
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is
international
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an international
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organization to promote
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peacemaking
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and peacekeeping. UN do many things to save citizen in the
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state in the
world
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. Its first
operation
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started in late 1989-1994, in the middle 1990s, and towards the
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21st
century. Most of
conflicts
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the conflicts
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that
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the UN
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handle
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after
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the cold
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cold war
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ended
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increasing
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amount.
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said that the Security Council authorized a total of 20 new operations between 1989 and 1994, raising the number of peacekeepers from 11,000 to 75,000. The number of UN peacekeeping
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operation
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is
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shown a drastic improvement number
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complexity
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the complexity
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of
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conflict
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the conflict
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. United
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conducted a multidimensional and complicated task as a safeguard in order to keep the
world
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safe. In the first
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of UN
peacekeeping
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peacekeeping,
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it was plain to see that the military personnel
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main
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focus
to handle
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conflict
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. Take the example
ONUSAL
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(UN Observer mission in El Salvador).
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at the beginning the
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could
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easily by military personnel,
but
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in fact the problem was more complicated. In the period of reassessment (
mid 1990s
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) UN found difficulties in handling multidimensional
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in Somalia (UNOSOM). The
conflict
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was
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failed to
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because
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two parties
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warring.
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the military has
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in that
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area but UN still could not make parties stop warring
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each
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other. UN see its limitation
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this
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case. There were many
problem
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that
UN
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should review at the same time including administrators,
economist
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economists
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, human
right
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rights
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monitors, civil
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affairs
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and governance
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. Towards
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the 21st
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new
operation
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and
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challenge, take the example of Timor
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(UNTAET). Timor
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at that time was in the process of gaining independence from Indonesia. The other example is on the Kosovo (UNMIK). UN learned to improve its safekeeping
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limit. In the case of Kosovo and East Timor,
UN
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provided administrative aid to help
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this
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both
state
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. UN
have
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done
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hard
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effort to maintain and control the state during and after
conflict
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.
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me, what
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have
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done for better peace in
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world
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must be appreciated highly (Nobel Prize 1988). Without the existence of
UN
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the UN
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as
international
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an international
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organization,
citizen
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citizens
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will never feel
live
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as comfortable as now. There will be many innocent victims caused by civil war. Even though
at
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several
case
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cases
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of operations UN stuck in its limits
but
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in general its contribution influence to
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world
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is significant.
UN
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The UN
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can be
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mediator in peace negotiation, its role ensure
balance
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service in short or
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condition
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in many countries.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
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  • even though
  • despite

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