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Nowadays, more people would rather purchase food than cook at home. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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These days, there is a trend that people prefer to buy processed
food
, rather than prepare their meals at home.
Although
 there are certain benefits
to
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of
this
 trend, I believe that homemade
food
 is far more beneficial than
readymade
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ready made
food
. On the one hand, it is clear that purchasing processed
food
 outside at restaurants or convenient stores can bring several benefits.
Firstly
, buying
food
 at
such
 places helps people to save a lot of time
from
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for
 cooking at home.
As a result
, they can hang out with their family and friends.
Besides
, since many young people have spent a long day for a nine-to-five job, they might be too tired to prepare their meals.
Therefore
, they might be happy to order some
readymade
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ready made
food
 products from the Internet.
On the other hand
, despite these benefits, there are many drawbacks to buying
readymade
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ready made
food
 products.
Firstly
, due to the short preparation time, many people
are
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is
 more likely to buy fast
food
 for their meals.
This
 might cause serious health problems in the near future, including diabetes, obesity, cholesterol and so on. Another minus point is that buying a meal outside is quite expensive compared to
homemade meal
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a homemade meal
.
Moreover
, many people tend to spend more money on drinks or other services when they have a meal outside. In conclusion, while there are some plus points of having processed
food
 regarding saving time and having an easier life, in a long run I believe that these benefits are outweighed by the drawbacks in terms of maintaining a healthy body as well as saving money.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience food
  • Time-efficient
  • Culinary skills
  • Dietary habits
  • Takeout culture
  • Meal prep
  • Fast food
  • Home-cooked meal
  • Nutritional value
  • Consumerism
  • Family dynamics
  • Cultural heritage
  • Food industry
  • Ready-made meals
  • Eating out
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