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Nowadays, more people would rather purchase food than cook at home. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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These days, there is a trend that people prefer to buy processed
food
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, rather than prepare their meals at home.
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 there are certain benefits
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of
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 trend, I believe that homemade
food
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 is far more beneficial than
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ready made
food
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. On the one hand, it is clear that purchasing processed
food
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 outside at restaurants or convenient stores can bring several benefits.
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, buying
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 at
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 places helps people to save a lot of time
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for
 cooking at home.
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, they can hang out with their family and friends.
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, since many young people have spent a long day for a nine-to-five job, they might be too tired to prepare their meals.
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, they might be happy to order some
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ready made
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 products from the Internet.
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, despite these benefits, there are many drawbacks to buying
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ready made
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 products.
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, due to the short preparation time, many people
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 more likely to buy fast
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 for their meals.
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 might cause serious health problems in the near future, including diabetes, obesity, cholesterol and so on. Another minus point is that buying a meal outside is quite expensive compared to
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a homemade meal
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, many people tend to spend more money on drinks or other services when they have a meal outside. In conclusion, while there are some plus points of having processed
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 regarding saving time and having an easier life, in a long run I believe that these benefits are outweighed by the drawbacks in terms of maintaining a healthy body as well as saving money.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience food
  • Time-efficient
  • Culinary skills
  • Dietary habits
  • Takeout culture
  • Meal prep
  • Fast food
  • Home-cooked meal
  • Nutritional value
  • Consumerism
  • Family dynamics
  • Cultural heritage
  • Food industry
  • Ready-made meals
  • Eating out
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