The number of people who are at risk of serious health problems due to being overweight is increasing. What is the reason for the growth in overweight people in society? How can this problem be resolved?

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It is a bitter truth that lots of

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serious diseases like high blood pressure,

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overweight

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being overweight

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. There are myriad reasons behind

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deplorable condition. I will discuss some of them in the following paragraph and try to give some

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as well. First of all, lack of physical activity in daily routine is a primary reason for the overweight issue. Technology and

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unbalanced

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diet

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weight

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dramatically. From the University research, It has been proven that too much consumption of junk food increases the

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significantly because it is too heavy for the digestive system.

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way,

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are getting overweight.

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, regular physical exercise can reduce the possibility of getting

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issues.

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walk may put you in pink-full health for decades and helps to control the

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of the body.

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balanced and healthy diet can control

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in the diet and

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fast food like Pizza,

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as much as possible.

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, Overweight is a serious problem but It can be possible to avoid by doing exercise regularly and taking healthy food. Overweighting is a disease which can happen because of human errors.

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Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

obesity
sedentary
caloric intake
genetics
nutritional awareness
processed foods
fast food
lifestyle diseases
preventative measures
tax incentives
urban planning
community gardens
wellness initiatives
dietary guidelines
physical fitness
calorie-dense
portion control
metabolic rate
health literacy
food deserts
work-life balance
junk food
BMI (Body Mass Index)
non-communicable diseases
food labeling

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The number of people who are at risk of serious health problems due to being overweight is increasing. What is the reason for the growth in overweight people in society? How can this problem be resolved?

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

A 14-year-old young who seriously damaged school was made to clean streets as a punishment. Do you think young criminals should be sent to prison or there are alternative forms of punishment? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people hold the view that a good teacher is more important for education success while others think the student’s attitude is more important to succeed in education. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.