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Rising of traffic on roads has become a deadly problem not only in our country but through out the world .

#traffic #roads #country #world
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 we are going to discuss
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the
 steps to control
traffic
 at
society
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societal
 and individual level In
such
 a diverse country
such
 as India
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traffic
 can be easily seen on roads
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it
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It
 is a responsibility of an individual to reduce
traffic
 and to do so an individual can increase the use of public transport to various places like offices
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 restaurants
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 malls
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 museums
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
instead
 of operating
there
of them or themselves
their
 own private transport
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it
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It
minimise
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minimises
has minimised
 the automobiles on roads and create less pollution as public vehicles work on compact natural gas
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CNG
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 which heels the nature
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 Walking is the best medicine to stay healthy and
instead
 of using vehicles to
breif
of short duration or distance
brief
 distance
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 marching can consume time as well as efforts but can minimise
traffic
 and pollution
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sometimes
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Sometimes
 we have to
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
 something precious in order to gain something priceless’ and here
less
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the less traffic
traffic
 means less honks
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 clean roads
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 stable environment and healthy life As a society we can make
public aware
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the public aware
 of
Harms
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the Harms
 of
traffic
 on roads through non government organisation
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NGO
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 or posters or marching on roads and we should make people aware of proper driving rules and regulation
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 Age and speed limit should be carefully examined
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Rash driving should be avoided because someone is waiting for you at home
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