The chart below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full time work did after leaving college in 2008 Summarise the information by selecting main features and make comparison where relevant

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information about the

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decisions of the UK’s

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and

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who finished

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full time

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, in 2008.

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, it can be seen, the number of

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were

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roughly 10 times less than

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;

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, the trends showed similar patterns.

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students

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, who finished

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, chose

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, clearly 29665

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. Meanwhile, it was about 8 times more than

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who chose

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in voluntary work, 3500. At that time, selectors of part-time work and unemployment were on average, 17735 and 16235, respectively. In terms of

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, they were nearly 10 times less than college

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. In 2008

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most

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chose either

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job, who were 2725 and 2535, respectively. On contrary, 345

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tried voluntary activities.

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, 1625

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have no jobs. In summary, both tables

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common patterns;

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most

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have enrolled

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, the least ones have decided to do voluntary

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further, whereas".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, postgraduates, study, students with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

158 words

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It is important for people to take risks, in both their professional lives and personal lives. Do the advantages of taking these risks outweigh the disadvantages?

The two layouts illustrate the current situation of norbition industrial area and its coming changes which may happen in the following years ,as it can be seen in the maps,there is going to be a vast varition in general structure of this zone in its future plan.