The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status
The chart illustrates the number of leisure
hours
spent by men and women in one typical week between 1989 and 1999 according to
employment status.
There are five catagories
: Employed including Correct your spelling
categories
full
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full-time
time
and part
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part-time
time
, unemployed, retired and housewives
. Overall
, the hour of spare time
spent by males were higher than Add an article
a female
the female
female
with an exception of the employed Fix the agreement mistake
females
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part-time
part
Add a hyphen
part-time
time
and housewives
According to
the chart, the number of hours
of male
in both unemployed and retired status reach Fix the agreement mistake
males
the
peak of over 80 Correct article usage
a
hours
, whereas
the female in the same status remain constant at under 40 hours
. The
Correct article usage
A
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similar
similiar
trend Correct your spelling
similar
also
occurs with both genders who are employed full-time
, where female touches the lowest point and roughly 10 hours
less than male
On the other hand
, the employed part-time
and housewives
groups are dominated by women with the amount of leisure hours
are
approximately 40 Wrong verb form
being
hours
and 50 hours
per week respectively. In contrast
, men employed part
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part-time
time
or as a
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housewives
a housewife
housewives
had no spare time
.
The conclusion that can be drawn from the graph is females enjoy comparatively less than their male counterpart
and unemployed and retired people have the highest leisure Fix the agreement mistake
counterparts
time
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, time, housewives with synonyms.
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