Two pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992

Two pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992
The total comparison of manual and non-manual occupation among men and women in
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in the span of 1992 is the main objective of the provided pie charts. In
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manner, both
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genders constituted the remarkable increase in
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which was the
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females working, at 31%, the rate of male working
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to 6%. Craft or similar
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an over eighth-fold increase to 24%from 3%. Both genders who worked
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general labourers (approximately 2%)
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recorded which was much smaller than
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-24%. The most dominant percentage of the managerial and professional was occupied in figures of men occupation (36%)
while
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sector comprised a tiny lower 29% in women working. There was a marginal development in the portion of male-6% compare with
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of
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working (9%)

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