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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transport in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transport in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.
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The line chart illustrates the number of
products
 shipped in the UK by four various types of transportation, namely road,
water
, railway and pipeline from 1974 to 2002.
Overall
, all types of goods transport experienced an upward trend, in which the roadway is the most
of
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popular transportation, following that were the
water
, railway and
the
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pipeline was the lowest. There was a slight increase in the quantities of
products
 transported by
the
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road from 70
million
tonnes
 in 1974 to 82
million
tonnes
 in 1990,
then
 it continued to rise gradually to 97
million
tonnes
 in 2002.
At
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 the beginning, the
amount
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 of goods shipped by the pipeline was at 4
million
tonnes
, by 1994, it grew moderately to 22
million
tonnes
 and
this
 figure still did not change in 2002. Over a four-year period between 1974 to 1978, the number of
products
 shipped by the
water
 and rail line
were
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 about the same
to
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40
million
tonnes
. In the
next
 years, there was a fluctuation in the quantities of goods shipped by the railway with the lowest figure
was
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 28
million
tonnes
 in 1994 and the highest
was
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 41
million
tonnes
 in 2002.
While
,
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 the number of
products
 transported by the
water
 road climbed slowly to 68
million
tonnes
 by 2002.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words products, water, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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