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I think women, especially housewives, are keen to go to open markets on a regular basis because it is a kind of way to socialise for them, and they can find fruits and vegetables at reasonable prices in open markets. I think open market
are
Suggestion
is
 suitable places for selling items, especially items that low income people can'
t
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 buy in shops,
such
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 as supermarkets, clothing stores, of their tag prices. Clothes, vegetables, dairy products can be sold in open markets. Elder people are eager to go shopping in open markets
becuase
for the reason that; on account of
because
 they used to do so, but young people are worried about shopping in open markets. They feel insecure about the health conditions of the products sold in open markets. You can be sure if the products meet some essential conditions,
such
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 as health. You can come across a
campaing
a race between candidates for elective office
campaign
camping
 and buy the product you want at a lower price. You
cand
able to
can
 find anything you are looking for in a shop if it is big enough without being affected by weather conditions. People now are more connected to the technology, so they are open to do online shopping without the need to go to
markets
Suggestion
market
.
This
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 is likely to change people's overall shopping habit. I do not make
phone
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 calls often because I don'
t
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 like
phone
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 calling. I don'
t
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like communicate with people
Suggestion
like to communicate with people
 without seeing their faces. I think customer services officers talk
most
Suggestion
mostly
 on
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phone
Suggestion
the phone
 because they do deal with the issues of customers who are not in
same place
Suggestion
the same place
 with them.They do it constantly, and I don'
t
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 think it takes short time to solve all customers' problems. I am not sure about it, but I will probably make the
next
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phone
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 call to order a big bottle of water to my place. I always prefer to send an
sms
a short text message sent between mobile phones or other electronic devices
SMS
 rather than making a
phone
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 call if it is possible because as I mentioned before, I really don'
t
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 like making
phone
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 calls.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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