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Some people believe government should spend money on building train and subway lines to reduce traffic congestion. Others think that building more and wider roads is the better way to reduce traffic congestion. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is true that
traffic
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 congestion nowadays is a serious problem for most countries in the world, especially developing countries. While many people think that extending more and wider roads is the best solution to resolve the problem, I would agree with those who believe
the better
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the best
 way to reduce
traffic
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 jam is building
train
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trains
 and subway lines. On the one hand, there are some clear reasons why the extension and construction of roads can alleviate the volume of
traffic
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.
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 of all, the existing roads are inadequate to provide the space for the increase of cars. In big cities, people who live on the outskirts usually commute to work by their own car.
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 may lead to a rise in
traffic
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 congestion in both inside and outside the city. Governments,
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, should spend money to build and extend roads to cope with
traffic
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 jams.
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, since the more network of roads is built people are able to drive
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in
 an alternative way to avoid
crowd
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crowds
 when
traffic
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 congestion occurs.
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, people believe that government spending money on building train and subway lines is
better decision
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a better decision
 to tackle
traffic
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 jams.
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, since
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 public transport usually runs quickly than cars, people tend to prioritise these forms of transport to travel.
This
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 may relieve the pressure on current roads.
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, sometimes there is rarely available land to extend
further
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 roads, especially in large cities. A metro network, built underground, would
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 be a more practical option, and it has proved in many cities across the world. In conclusion,
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 extending the size of roads can reduce
traffic
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 jams, it seems to me that installing train and subway lines is a better choice to reduce the number of vehicles on roads.

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