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The bar chart shows the amount spent on digital games in the USA and China from 2010 to 2017 and the pie chart chart shows global spending on these games in 2017.

The bar chart shows the amount spent on digital games in the USA and China from 2010 to 2017 and the pie chart chart shows global spending on these games in 2017.
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The given charts represent the money spent on digital games in the
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 States and China from 2010 to 2017 and the total spending worldwide
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 2017.
In
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 the beginning of the period,
Americans
 spent the most
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 digital gaming
whereas
 the
Chinese
 overtook
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 figure
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 2017. Both countries showed an increasing trend
while
 China's spending increased more dramatically during the period. Most people spent their money on mobile gaming in 2017 all around the world.
According to
 the bar chart,
Americans
 spent
double
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amount
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 of money compared to
Chinese
 people
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 gaming
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 2010. 6 years later, the amount of spending was relatively similar at below 25
billion
dollars
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 2017,
Chinese
 people spent more than 25
billion
dollars
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 gaming
while
Americans
 remained at 25
billion
dollars
. Both
Chinese
 and
Americans
 made up almost half the market
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gaming
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the
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worldwide. In 2017, mobile gaming has the largest market around the globe at a figure
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billion
dollars
whereas
 computer gaming was the least which was only a quarter of the total market.

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