The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in

Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time.
Overall
, it is clear from the chart that the highest
education
of
women
included more than 1000 people was in 1999 when they were in part-shift,
while
men
had a rise
of
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education
that contained only 1000 people in 1970 on the same shift.
Likewise
,
women
had the smallest
matched
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of
education
under the full shift which was below 100 in 1971,
whereas
,
men owned
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the smallest
level
under
same
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shift which was about 100 in the same year. Between 1970 and 1990, the
women
increase their
education
degree to
higher
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matched ground on the
part
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part-time
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time
which was from 100 to 1200. Contrary, there was
lower
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level
in the full
time
of
education
by
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women
over a period of 21 years which was from 150 to 200 people.
However
,
men
decreased
educational
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their educational
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degree
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degrees
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between 1970 and 1980
throughout
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through
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the part
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part
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time
of
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information. It came down from 1000 to 700 persons, whilst, the
education
level
of them increased from 100 to 200 individuals when they had
full
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time
education
during same years.
However
, both
women
and
men
had
same
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level
of discipline which was 200 persons when they were taking
full
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the full
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time
. But in 1981
men
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education
level
was lower than
women
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women's
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schooling
level
in the full
time
.
Therefore
, it can be seen that the
education
level
of
women
was
further
than
men
in both full and
part-times
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part-time
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • full-time education
  • part-time education
  • further education
  • gender comparison
  • trend analysis
  • notable increase
  • decrease
  • consistent trend
  • educational patterns
  • substantial differences
  • preferences
  • evolve
  • societal factors
  • economic influences
  • accessibility
  • job market
  • gender roles
  • projections
  • implications
  • educational policy
  • workforce development
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