The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time.
Overall
, it is clear from the chart that the highest education
of women
included more than 1000 people was in 1999 when they were in part-shift, while
men
had a rise of
Change preposition
in
education
that contained only 1000 people in 1970 on the same shift. Likewise
, women
had the smallest matched
of Replace the word
match
education
under the full shift which was below 100 in 1971, whereas
, men owned
the smallest Add a hyphen
men-owned
level
under same
shift which was about 100 in the same year.
Between 1970 and 1990, the Correct article usage
the same
women
increase their education
degree to higher
matched ground on the Add an article
the higher
part
Add a hyphen
part-time
time
which was from 100 to 1200. Contrary, there was lower
Correct article usage
a lower
level
in the full time
of education
by
Change preposition
for
women
over a period of 21 years which was from 150 to 200 people. However
, men
decreased educational
Correct pronoun usage
their educational
degree
between 1970 and 1980 Fix the agreement mistake
degrees
throughout
Change preposition
through
Add an article
the part
part
Add a hyphen
part-time
time
of
information. It came down from 1000 to 700 persons, whilst, the Change preposition
apply
education
level
of them increased from 100 to 200 individuals when they had full
Add a hyphen
full-time
time
education
during same years. However
, both women
and men
had same
Change the article
the same
level
of discipline which was 200 persons when they were taking full
Add an article
the full
time
. But in 1981 men
Change noun form
men's
education
level
was lower than women
schooling Change noun form
women's
level
in the full time
. Therefore
, it can be seen that the education
level
of women
was further
than men
in both full and part-times
.Correct your spelling
part-time
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