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It is neither possible nor useful for a country to provide university places for a high proportion of young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Furnishing younger generations with tertiary
education
 play an indispensable part in the government’s policies.
However
, most policy makers reckon that it is infeasible and inefficient to offer the vast majority of the youth higher
education
. From my perspective, I completely agree with
this
 statement for the following reasons. It proves impossible for a country to provide entry to tertiary
education
 for all young people. The
first
 reason is the prohibitive tuition fees and the inability to afford them of the majority of youths. College or university undergraduates are supposed to learn from experiments, purchase costly materials during a term, let alone other field trips if one major in practical fields of study like engineering or medicine. All of these plus the fact that many students from rural areas find it tough to meet only the annual tuition fees, especially in poverty-stricken countries.
This
 leads to the
second
 reason in which I mean government have other priorities
such
 as universal
education
, healthcare system to invest in. It
also
 does not seem useful for the whole country once the state wish to accommodate the youth with higher degrees.
This
 is primarily because there is no guarantee that students will become successful and contribute to the well-being of their nation after finishing their study. There are the cases when distinguished graduates fail to secure a decent job and
thus
 become unemployed, exacerbating the burden on society as a consequence. Even worse, some are likely to slack off with their studies or even drop out of school as they either take higher study for granted or find no motivation in furthering their knowledge, given the thought that tertiary
education
 is subsidized or free of charge. In conclusion, it’s my firm belief that not only it is neither possible nor useful for a country to provide university places for a high proportion of young people
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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