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In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. Do the advantages of such method outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, many people claim that the
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car
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 ownerships
tax
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 and using
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money
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 to upgrade public transportation should be performed by governments.
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 there are some negative aspects of
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 decision, there are compelling reasons as to why
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 is overall a desirable trend. On the one hand, there are some drawbacks to the
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 in private
car
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 owners'
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. The main shortcoming is that citizens must spend
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 on
car
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tax
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.
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 plays an important role as a factor contributing to decreasing the household budget.
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, people suffer from stress-related problems because of the
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 in financial pressure. Another disadvantage is that the reduction of business activities related to cars
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 as repairing cars and trading petroleum.
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 stems from the limit of using private vehicles by citizens. The salient, most examples of
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 that the amount of
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 from trading, petroleum drops to 20 % in case the vehicle number declines to 10 %.
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, it seems to me that the taxing of heavily private ownerships is necessary because of some undeniable benefits.
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, it is an apparent fact that the
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 makes citizens use public transports. It is vital for people to protect environments.
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 is caused by the reduction of greenhouse gas emissions
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 as CO2, CH4, and NO2 from private vehicles. According to the statistics of environmentalists, 30 % of total emissions will reduce if 20 % of the population uses public transports. Another advantage could be that the
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 from the private
car
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tax
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car
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tax
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 can use to improve traffic systems, including building roads and bridges.
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 makes it easier for citizens to travel.
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,
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 contributes to reducing traffic congestion during peak hours. In conclusion, there are some minus points for taxing of private vehicles.
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, it seems to me that its advantage would be more important.
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