The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line chart illustrated the amount of
money
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spends
by five categories among the different Wrong verb form
spent
age
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group
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groups
in
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of
the
British citizens in the year Correct article usage
apply
of
2004.
A large number of Change preposition
apply
money
spend on food and drinks Use synonyms
at
least Change preposition
for at
by
under 30 and the highest amounts spend by 76+.
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apply
To begin
with, the highest amount of Linking Words
money
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spending
on food and drink in all Replace the word
spent
age
groups, except that under 30. Use synonyms
As well as
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highest
spending Correct article usage
the highest
by
76+.
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of
In addition
, restaurants, and hotels Linking Words
popular
among all Add a missing verb
are popular
age
groups, except for 61-75 and 75+, the number Use synonyms
of
percentages like 2% and 7% spending Change preposition
apply
by
respectively.
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apply
Moreover
, the highest percentage Linking Words
spending
on entertainment Change preposition
of spending
it
was Correct pronoun usage
apply
61
-75 Correct article usage
the 61
age
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group
, Use synonyms
as
around almost 23%. Change preposition
at
As well as
6%,Linking Words
7
%, spending Correct word choice
and 7
by
under 30 Change preposition
apply
age
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group
and Use synonyms
31
-45 Correct article usage
the 31
age
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group
respectively.
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In addition
, Linking Words
46
-60 and 76+ Correct article usage
the 46
ages
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age
group
percentage rank Use synonyms
similarly
equal Linking Words
like as
14% and 13% respectively.
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at
Overall
, it is clearly observed that the highest amount of Linking Words
money
spends on food and drinks Use synonyms
as well as
a restaurant and hotels.Linking Words
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as, in addition".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, age, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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