The diagram shows how coffee is produced from beans.

The given diagram illustrates the production of

coffee

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Overall

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, there are a total of 10 stages in order to make a cup of delicious

coffee

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. Cultivating is the first stage,

then

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the

beans

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were processed,

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Correct word choice

and lastly

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lastly

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,lastly

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we can enjoy the

coffee

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after brewing.

Firstly

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, the

beans

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are cultivated

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the farm,

then

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, they are picked up by farmers with their hands before being processed with 2 different methods either dry or wet. After

that

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,that

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the

beans

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will be milled using a milling machine.

After

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this

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, the

beans

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are shipped to the

coffee

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factory for

further

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processing. They are roasted and

then

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grinded

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ground

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in a grinding machine before they are packed into beautiful

pakages

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packages

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Finally

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,Finally

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the

coffee

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is consumed after brewing with a

coffee

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machine.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.

Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, beans with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

124 words

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