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Crime rate, in most countries, is often higher in urban areas than rural area. Why do you think that is? What can be done to reduce the crime rate?

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In the recent decade,
crime
 has increased to a tremendous
level especially
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level, especially
 in big cities of various nations in comparison to the countryside. The reasons attributed to
this
 problem are unemployment and financial pressure,
however
, in order to curb it, the
government
 should generate new employment opportunities for the individuals and
also
 offer some vocational training to dampen the
crime
 rate.
To begin
 with, unemployment is the primary reason for increased criminal activities in metro cities. The people migrate from rural areas in search of better employment opportunities and try to settle there only as all the basic necessities are available within a few
kilometers
a metric unit of length equal to 1000 meters (or 0.621371 miles)
kilometres
.
However
, some of the people are
no
in the historical present; at this point in the narration of a series of past events
now
 able to find the appropriate job as per their
skills
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skills, hence
hence
, they remain unemployed that, in turn, create financial pressure as life in urban areas is expensive as compared to rural. They opt the way of crimes
such
 as robbery, kidnaps, and snatching
etcetera
 to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 their needs.
Although
,
this
 problem can be solved if the
government
 provides training programs to the individuals as per the demand of the market, in order, to make them capable of obtaining a job in the cities, so that, they can
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 their dreams.
Additionally
, the
government
 should generate new job opportunities for the youth in order to make their future safe.
In other words
, if the future of the individual will be secured he will not follow the wrong path, to complete his basic necessities and will be less motivated towards
crime
. To conclude, the ever-increasing
crime
 in the metro cities of several nations is due to the no vacancies and more financial instability,
although
, the
government
 can take specific measures to tackle
this
 problem
such
 as generating fresh jobs for youngsters and by providing them specific vocation training.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crime rate
  • urban areas
  • rural areas
  • populations
  • economic disparities
  • illegal activities
  • anonymity
  • unemployment
  • youth
  • drug and gang problems
  • aggressive behavior
  • temptation
  • denser living conditions
  • pronounced
  • alternative means of income
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