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More and more companies are allowing employees to work at home. Do you think this is a positive or negative development.

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Nowadays people more often
work
 from
home
 because of advances in the technologies. In general, I would argue that has more negative impacts than positive.  On the one hand, companies have access to a wider pool of applicants -
for example
,
such
 as those from more geographically remote areas. Working from
home
 is the freedom due to workers would have a private atmosphere and feel comfortable and free. Employers which
work
 at
home
 can organise their
work
 around their
home
 life due to  as they can start
work
 as they need,
for instance
, they have children, they can easily pick them up from a school. They can
also
 perform any other tasks that they need to do during the day,
such
 as a laundry or cooking. They have more energy for
work
 due to the don't spend time on the road. The
first
 of these is many staffs becomes lazier because they have more hours at
home
 and they often get up late. 
Secondly
, who
work
 at
home
 will not communicate with colleagues.
This
 may lead to people won't learn experiences from their colleagues, boost their  skills
such
 as communication and teamwork, which is really important for the development of the company, so working from
home
 suits some personality types but not others. Some people may prefer colleague contact by face to face communication. Your company can have an information security risk - information security problems could be more likely to occur. In conclusion,
although
 there are positives and negatives related to working from
home
.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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