Many children are encouraged by their parents to get a part time job in their free time. What are the advantages and disadvantages to children of doing so?

Recently it
is become
Suggestion
has become
customory
in accordance with convention or custom
customary
that, encourage children by their parents to get a
part
time
job
in their leisure
time
has substantial drawback and
definete
precise; explicit and clearly defined
definite
advantages, the question of whether is a positive or negative are complex. On the personal level, it appears indisputable that there are some children who are
quiet bright,
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bright, quiet
quite bright,
but who are simply not interested in formal
learning and
Accept comma addition
learning, and
they may show an aptitude for working with their hands, or want to start own business and become
entreprenurs
someone who organizes a business venture and assumes the risk for it
entrepreneurs
. As the result a
part
time
job
might be
opportunity
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an opportunity
to achieve
such
ambitions. To clarify
this
point, during college or school days if students working like waiter at restaurants it can teach how the employer do their work seriously and independent and
also
teaches them how to run their own business in the future.
However
, detractors of
such
opinion Say that, Educational qualifications are considered to be very important in the modern world. They are essential for people who want to find reasonably well paid employment in the professions, for
this
reason students always try to work hard at school and achieve academic success by doing well in exams. In
this
way, working in
part
time
job
during the study become a high obstacle to achieve a good degree.
However
, it is true that when the students have
willingness
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a willingness
to work a
part
time
job
it will create the mental and physical development of children. And it is perfectly possible for students to achieve
such
ambitions. To conclude,
Im
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I'm
convinced that a
part
time
job
has
plethora
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a plethora
of advantages and disadvantages, but I tend to believe that parents should motivate their children to do the
part
time
job
As it teaches them better qualities, and manage the daily routine.
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